User talk:Spy007au/Sandbox6
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[edit]Hi mate, this is a good detailed lead now and probably enough detail... ;-) You perhaps want to trim the second and third paras a little bit, say leaving out refs to other people like his navigator (that level of detail is better for the main body). Then to fill out things you should add a sentence or two about his post-war life to the third para. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:07, 1 February 2011 (UTC)