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Reviewer: Aiken 19:07, 26 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looking good. No big issues, just some minor points before I can promote:

Lead
  • "The tale tells of a badger..." I don't really like 'tale tells'. Story might be a good alternative.

 Done I chose "The tale is about..." to rid the sentence of the "tee-tee" sound of "tale tells". Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Background
  • "Following the acquisition of Hill Top Farm in Lancashire..." I thought it was Cumbria? I'm assuming it used to be in Lancashire - this should be clarified.

 Done Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • The first sentence is three lines long. Consider splitting it up.

 Done Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • What is the "Peter Rabbit saga"? I mean, are the books a series, or just similar format by the same author?

 Done Rewritten. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Is "well-behaved people" a scare quote, or someone's words?

 Done Rewritten. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Plot
  • Seems a bit short for what was one of her longest stories.

 Done Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

General
  • I've suggested you refer to Mr. Tod as a story. You've referring to it as a book and a tale. Whatever you use, be consistent and choose one.

 Done For Potter, tale and story were two different things. She preferred tale. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Images
  • Lots of pictures. It seems a bit crowded. Perhaps the pictures of the live animals could be removed, as they don't really add much imo.

 Done Deleted. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Check the source info, at least one has a broken link.

 Done Deleted. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Placing on hold. Aiken 13:17, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. Aiken 21:55, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.