Talk:The Show (Girls Aloud song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 10:46, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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Dance-pop before Electropop as D is before E
Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The alternate cover needs to go, no information about it.
Removed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"from their" → "for their". They don't record songs from the album.
Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The synth rhythm was composed by Shave, and the track is noted from being a departure of the band's previous guitar-influenced sound." → "The synth rhythm, composed by Shave, represents a change in musical direction from the bands previous releases."
Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The single was received favourably by contemporary music critics," → "It garnered a positive response from music critics,"
Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"in Europe and Ireland, while charting in Australia in 2006." → "in Ireland and certain European territories. In 2006, it charted at number 67 on Australia's singles chart."
Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

"As their first single following the cover, "The Show" served as an introduction to Girls Aloud's new sound. Rather than the guitar that dominated the band's first three singles, "The Show" mostly utilises synthesisers." → These need sourcing.
Take a look. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

It's very quotey, try putting some into your own words.
I tried to paraphrase a bit, but there are many terms there that can't be replaced by common words. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:09, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah that is better. — AARON • ^TALK 12:16, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Status

Please you took noted of my comments in other reviews and applied them here. On hold. — AARON • ^TALK 20:10, 22 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passing. — AARON • ^TALK 12:16, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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