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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:12, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will try to have this completely reviewed by tomorrow --K. Peake 21:12, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Genre is unsourced; just because they are a post-hardcore band, does not automatically make the album that genre
  • The word "record label" is not needed in the lead since that context is unnecessary here
  • "for their third studio album" → "for their third studio album,"
  • "recorded Start the Party with" → "recorded the album with" though you need to mention next to his reference in the first section that he was producer
  • "Start the Party revolves around party-going; it was compared to" → "It revolves around party-going, having received comparisons to"
  • "of the Foo Fighters, and" → "of the Foo Fighters and"
  • "Initial promotion consisted of a headlining UK tour," I thought the opening sentence was referencing their January 2013 tour of the country?
  • "embarked upon a UK tour" → "embarked on a UK tour"
  • "Start the Party reached" → "The album reached"
  • "in the UK album charts, while "Start the Party" and" → "on the UK Albums Chart. "Start the Party" and" with the wikilink; suggesting splitting since the last para is currently only two sentences long which is definitely too short

Background and production

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  • Target crowd-funded to Crowdfunding
  • "While writing it," → "While writing the album,"
  • "or label to" → "or record label to"
  • "The band promoted" → "The Blackout promoted"
  • "of their previous tours," → "of their touring,"
  • "They recorded with" → "The band recorded with"
  • "The band initially planned" → "The Blackout initially planned"
  • "The Blackout" while Borland's" → "The Blackout", while Borland's"
  • "when they band realised" → "when the band realised"

Composition and lyrics

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  • "at the moment"." → "at the moment."" since that is a full quote
  • "a hip-hop-less version" → "a hip hop-less version" with the target
  • "drew comparison to" → "drew comparisons to"
  • "The record had less" → "The album has less"
  • "Butler and Smith said" → "Smith and vocalist Gavin Butler said" since he should be introduced earlier in the article instead
  • "leans on the band's" → "leans toward the Blackout's"
  • "is one of the album's" → "is one of Start the Party's"
  • Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
  • "about those of others." → "about the lives of others."
  • "This is followed by" → "The track is followed by"
  • "which has an introduction" → "which has an intro"

Release and touring

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  • Retitle to Release and promotion
  • Img main text should instead say that they toured throughout 2013
  • "On 17 September," → "On 17 September of that year,"
  • "the following January." → "in January 2013"
  • "through the band's website." → "through the Blackout's website."
  • "the UK in October." → "the UK in October 2013."
  • "Vocalist Gavin Butler said he was" → "Butler said he was"
  • "live performances from their" → "live performances from the band's"
  • "includes covers of" → "features covers of"
  • Target administration to Business administration
  • "moved to the respective venues" → "moved to selected venues"
  • "in January and February," → "in January and February of 2013,"
  • "on 2 April the same year." → "was released on 2 April 2013."
  • "from these appearances was used for" → "from their appearance was used in"
  • "In October," → "In October of that year,"
  • "in the UK with" → "across the UK, with"
  • "to last until November," → "to last until November 2013;"
  • "vocalist Gavin Butler had a" → "Butler had a"
  • "for January and February 2014," → "for January and February of 2014,"

Reception

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  • "singable hooks."" → "singable hooks"." for consistency
  • "found it" → "found the album"
  • Target pop to Pop music
  • "Butler's "accessible" → "He further wrote that Butler's "accessible"
  • "into stars."" → "into stars"."
  • "said the band" → "admitted that the Blackout"
  • "polished album,"" → "polished album","
  • [17] should solely be at the end of the sentence
  • "said The Blackout come across" → "said the Blackout come across" per MOS:THEMUSIC
  • Target Scrappy Doo to Scrappy-Doo
  • "said if the band removed" → "wrote that if the band removed"
  • "of the expletives" → "of the expletives on Start the Party"
  • "to Inglis, the record's" → "to Inglis, the album's"
  • "what the members were" → "what the band members are"
  • "in the UK album charts." → "on the UK Albums Chart." with the wikilink
  • Merge the two sentences for the singles, changing where the second currently starts to being after a comma and saying: "while "Runnin' Scared" reached number 35 on the chart."

Track listing

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Personnel

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  • Use the Design sub-heading instead for photography, cover design and artwork

Charts

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  • Good

References

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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Done. Yeepsi (talk) 11:51, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Yeepsi  Pass after I completed some brief copyediting, applauds not only for your usual quick response but also a very well-written article! --K. Peake 13:56, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]