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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 09:25, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Reviewing shortly.♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:26, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lede
  • Perhaps "The explosion killed 439 miners and 1 rescuer; it is the worst mining accident in the United Kingdom" wold read better as "The explosion, which killed 439 miners and 1 rescuer, is the worst mining accident in the United Kingdom".
  • " Many of the collieries in field" -in the field?
  • What is " signalling gear"?
  • "which was to the dead of both the 1901 and 1913 explosions." -"was to the dead" a tad awkward, can this be reworded?
  • "In October 2013, on the centenary of the tragedy, a Welsh national memorial to all mine disasters was unveiled at the former pit head, depicting a rescue worker coming to the aid of one of the survivors of the explosion." -was there one man who made it worth mentioning or were there several?
Background
  • the Welsh coal industry -is there an article worth linking?
Coal industry in Wales is a definite core article and somehow missing!12:21, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
  • ""mines notorious for their gassy seams"," -attribute?
  • four miles - convert|4|mi for those who now work in kilometres?
  • What is a "long ton"?
14th Oct
  • "At 3:00 am on 14 October 1913 the day firemen descended the pit to conduct the daily checks for gas; they had three hours to complete their investigations. " -check punctuation.

@SchroCat: it was the lack of comma in "on 14 October 1913 the day firemen descended the pit", something doesn't quite seem right. Is "the day" needed?♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:20, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Is there an article on "afterdamp"? It would be good to learn more about that, not in this article of course but in another article.
Rescue
  • "three-quarters of a mile " -convert
Aftermath
  • "although he was described by the Duckhams as "undoubtedly a highly capable manager",[46] " -check punctuation
  • "A stage play based on the disaster, by journalist and broadcaster Margaret Coles, was first performed at the Sherman Cymru, Cardiff." -when was this?
  • "was unveiled at the former pit head. " -is it possible you could recamp on where that is exactly, perhaps a coordinate link in footnotes would help. I'd want to see exactly where it is on google maps.
  • All done, bar the last point. I'll try and find an RS to provide the link

@SchroCat: Review done, looks in good shape!♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:34, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Dr. Blofeld. All done and dusted bar the final point. I'll have a dig around to try and find the exact coordinates, and an RS to accompany it. Cheers - – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ah if it's in the exact location, don't worry then. ♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:17, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    B. MoS compliance:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail: Dr. Blofeld 13:25, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]