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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:49, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Comments looks like this was hanging around for too long, and it's a subject close to my upbringing, so here we go...

  • I agree it's not ideal, but the "Sutton Hoo ship-burial" is the standard name, and both links are relevant. This is the way it's linked in many articles that mention it.
  • It's similar in the infobox (although it looks like you've piped "ship-burial" differently from the way you do it in the lead).
  • Added a pipe.
  • Could we put a "(pictured in 2018)" in that caption? Or are we not clear when the photo was taken?
  • I don't know when it was taken. I've been meaning to send an email to his daughter, however, so will ask when I do so (she was the one who sent it to me).
  • General structure: I think three paras in the lead is too long for an article of this size, perhaps two (see WP:LEAD for MOS guidance).
  • Now only two paragraphs.
  • I think the article has strong UK ties, so we should go with "fibreglass" really.
  • Done.
  • Again, per TIES, I would expect the British Museum to have referred to "Medieval" as "Mediaeval" (or even "Mediæval"), could you just double-check that?
  • The article which is the source for that says Authors' address: Department of Medieval and Later Antiquities, British Museum, London WC1B 3DG, Great Britain. Happy to change it if we find a better source that says otherwise, though.
  • "Early life and education" not sure much of this is about "education" to be honest...
  • "and tried out with" would this be "had a trial with"? We don't really "try out" with football clubs in the UK.
  • Done.
  • "1954 to 1976 Peter van Geersdaele worked " no need to repeat his first name.
  • Removed.
  • "a process he replicated in October 1970 " perhaps could we use a different word from "replicated" as we're talking about "replicas" already...?
  • Done: a process he repeated in October 1970
  • "Anglo-Saxon Sutton Hoo ship-burial, " this is a triple-whammy SEAOFBLUE.
  • "two and a half decades " why not simply 26 years?
  • Done.
  • "fiberglass replica.[17][18]" you link "fiberglass" at this point...? (and apply the ENGVAR I'm recommending too if you agree).
  • Moved the link to the first mention, and changed the spelling.
  • " an estimated 6,100 kg (13,400 lb)" picky, but in 1970, did van Geersdaele really write about how much it weighed in kg first?
  • Yep: "It measures 23•8 in length and 4•3 m at its widest point amidships, and the estimated weight was approximately 6100 kg (Fig. 1)."
  • " twenty-five sections." 25 (you previously mentioned 85 sections, so consistent approach).
  • Done.
  • "in 1955,[1][34][1]" so good you ref'd [1] twice!
  • Hah! Removed.
  • Not a big deal, but I generally try to add the extra link.
  • Council Tax is a formal thing, so you can capitalise it (and maybe link it).
  • Done.

That's it for a quick pass, it's a nice neat article. I'll put the GAN on hold while we go through these minor issues. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:27, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review, The Rambling Man, and sorry for not responding earlier. I think I've responded to all your points above. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:02, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No worries, happy with your updates and responses above, some of the points I raise aren't covered by the GA criteria anyway, so I'm happy to promote. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:14, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]