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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 00:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Add a 's' after 'doughnut' in 'is a variety of cake doughnut...'
  • Remove the source; you do not need to cite sources in the lead if mentioned in the article
  • Again, remove any sources that are included in the lead
  • Add a hyphen in 'old fashioned' since that is the name of the article

Preparation

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  • Remove the '/or' in 'such as baking powder and/or baking soda,'

Commercial preparation

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  • Are the mixes solely manufactured in the United States? If not, I'd recommend mentioning other countries or replacing 'United States' with 'worldwide'
  • It's likely that general doughnut mixes are manufactured in other countries, but I'm unable to locate information about old-fashioned doughnut mixes as such. Most sources report about U.S. related aspects. Even searches for the generic "doughnut mix" are not providing much information. North America1000 18:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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  • The last sentence discussing doughnut makers could be expanded, possibly listing other doughnuts made with the aforementioned makers
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Nutritional information

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  • This section doesn't seem very important to me; considering there are so many variations of these donuts, is it really necessary to include this information? Since it probably should be included, I'd recommend finding another source to back up the facts you listed
  • Many food- and drink-related article include nutrition information, and its content is verified by a reliable book source. Reliable sources for comprehensive nutritional information about foods can be quite difficult to find (see source search examples below). I feel that this section enhances the article, whereas its omission would reduce the article's quality. North America1000 18:48, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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Variations

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  • The statement you mentioned is pretty good, but this section as a whole could be significantly expanded. And it should be significantly expanded
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References

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  • [4] - Includes the same author twice
  • Other than that (^), the references in the article are pretty solid

Categories

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  • You could add several categories to this article, including "Convenience foods", "Snack foods", "American cuisine", "American desserts", "World cuisine", etc.

End of GA Review:

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This article needs some expansion before passing GA status. I'm putting on hold until the nominator can significantly lengthen the article. Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 01:05, 6 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]

  • The article has been expanded. Note that there is not a great deal of extensive coverage about this topic, and that I created and expanded the article based upon source coverage available in online sources. North America1000 18:58, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I agree. Thanks for responding so swiftly. Carbrera (talk) 19:52, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]