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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk05:19, 14 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Messiaen in 1937
Messiaen in 1937

Created by Ron Oliver (talk). Nominated by Gerda Arendt (talk) at 21:43, 19 April 2020 (UTC).[reply]

  • New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced. There is close paraphrasing in the article which needs to be put in quotes or rewritten in your own words:
  • Source: unlike nearly all of his contemporaries, held an unshakable Catholic faith throughout his entire life
  • Article: unlike many contemporaries, held an unshakeable faith throughout his entire life
  • It seems that other phrases are pulled directly from the sources; I think you should go over them one by one and put in quotes any unusual wording, as I did with superhuman love. The cite for this sentence: Even though it is one of the composer's best-known works, he declared later that it was not representative of his compositional style. (footnote 4) does not verify anything.
  • All the book sources need page numbers. The hook facts about him being 29 and writing the composition in Latin need inline cites. The image is very clear and public domain. QPQ done. Yoninah (talk) 05:13, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I rephrased it in more chronological order. Ron? - The text - like all Catholic liturgical music is in Latin. Would we need a cite that Gloria is in Latin? Same for his age, calculating from date of birth, which source do we expect? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:19, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Ron, you may have to move or duplicate refs for the different order of facts, commission first. - Trimming the hook: drop the age as we are not sure about the date anyway, drop Latin, because if a reader doesn't see/know that it's Latin, s/he may not be interested in the whole thing. 1937 makes for a better match of pic and hook. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:02, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
ALT1: ... that O sacrum convivium!, an offertory motet for four-part choir probably completed by Olivier Messiaen (pictured) in 1937, remained his only work for the Catholic liturgy?
  • I really wouldn't know how to rephrase it, but Messiaen was Catholic and a large portion of his works deals with religious topics. Including that would make for a much more interesting hook, in my opinion. Ron Oliver (talk) 18:35, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unfortunately, close paraphrasing still remains in the article; indeed, the first printing of 1000 copies was not exhausted until the mid-1950s is a direct copy from the source. Yoninah requested that more work be done in this area, and still more is clearly needed. There are other issues in general: the block quote in Composition makes no sense where it is: I started reading it thinking it was contemporaneous with O sacrum convivium, only it turned out to be written 27 years later. I'd suggest a better lead-in, and perhaps summarizing the letter rather than reprinting the whole thing, perhaps with a representative quote or two. While I've made some textual changes for clarity, I think more are needed; "religious intentions", for example, is quite vague. Pinging Gerda Arendt and Ron Oliver. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:34, 30 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I apologize for the delay. I have changed the direct quote from the source. I believe the block quote is important and should not be summarized. Messiaen offered an explanation for why he never chose to write works that were intended for liturgy, which is exactly what is brought up in the previous sentence. It was indeed written 27 years later, which is stated on the name of the source below the quote itself. I cannot see why that is a problem. Gerda Arendt? Ron Oliver (talk) 07:25, 1 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]