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Wiki Education assignment: Behavioral Ecology 2022

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 August 2022 and 9 December 2022. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Thebullfrogwhisperer (article contribs). Peer reviewers: AnnieLiu13, B1deng, Frogboi123.

— Assignment last updated by Eurquhart02 (talk) 22:43, 10 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall a well done article. I made a few phrasing and syntax changes to the description and reproduction sections. For instance, I changed "Previous studies have separated male and female salamanders through common secondary sexual characteristics" to a shorter and more concise sentence, "Male and female L. luschani are sexually dimorphic." One thing that you wrote that I think is incorrect is that you said that the salamander is most sexually active in the spring. However, looking online, I found that Luschani's salamander is most sexually active in the cooler winter months. So I would recommend fact checking that sentence. Lastly, I added a few sentences under "habitat and distribution". Also made sure to cite the journal I got the information from. B1deng (talk) 22:13, 17 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Great article!! Some notes:

I deleted: "Luschan’s salamander is also known as Lyciasalamandra luschani basoglui and was formerly known as Mertensiella luschani." In the description, it says that Luschan’s salamander is also known as Lyciasalamandra luschani basoglui. Then, is list L. l. basoglui as one of three subspecies in the “subspecies” section. I also deleted the "formerly known as..." because the classification change is not recent (1925) and that information is listed in the synonyms section.

I went back and read the source on tourism impacts on conservation and rephrased your description. I couldn't quite tell how subspecies isolation led to conservation risk.

I changed several sentences for grammar and concision. For the sentence: "Additionally, in one study studying the diets of these salamanders, scientists found that males and females tended to have similar weights. There was a trend suggesting that females might weigh more but this was not statistically significant.", I don't think you need to add details about the experiment besides direct results. Frogboi123 (talk) 06:24, 18 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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I made edits to improve flow, fix spelling, and make the writing more clear and concise. I also moved around the sections, so speciation and genetics/phylogeny comes first, and reproduction comes before development. I also deleted multiple citations of the same source in a row. I think your article could be served well to include a Taxonomy section. I was confused because you continually switched the scientific name throughout. It is to my understanding that there are many synonyms to L. luschani as well as subspecies, but I recommend giving some backstory to how so many names came about, list them all, then pick one name to use and stick with it, so readers aren't confused and thinking they're reading about different frogs. Specifying which are subspecies and indicating this each time you use them as examples is also helpful. Are there any pure L. luschani species, or are there only species? Here is a link you could start with.

In the repro section, information about mating and courting behaviors could be helpful, especially ones that include the process and type/occurrence of amplexus.

In the Habitat section, restating the different geographical regions as well as any available extra info could help, such as elevation, distribution, specific locations (e.g. terrestrial, forest floor).

In the Conservation section, you cite the same source for where you explicitly state "one source" and "another source". I am unsure whether the error lies in the citation or the writing and recommend you clarify. When you also write "the salamander", are you referring to your specific Luschan's, or salamanders in general?

In the Diet section, you only list one subspecies' known diet. If there is info available, it would be good to add the diets of other sub/species. If none, you can state this.

In Dev/Life Cycle, your first sentence is confusing and I am unsure where you got this information from. It may help to elaborate on the "rested growth period. Is there any literature on womb development and offspring dependence on parents?

In Anat/Morph, when you write "68 nanometers", is this referring to the thickness? You also write the highest number of caudal vertebrae, 30, in some species. Did you mean to write samples or a similar term?

Cool article! I especially enjoyed the section about Anat/Phys.

AnnieLiu13 (talk) 07:26, 18 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]