Talk:La Salle Green Hills/GA1

GA Review

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Review by Epicadam (talk) 16:16, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
Run-on sentences are problems like "The educational work of the Brothers in the Philippines started when nine Brothers from Marseilles, France arrived in Manila on March 29, 1911 upon invitation of the American Archbishop of Manila, Jeremias J. Harty, himself an alumnus of a De La Salle High School in the United States, to establish a college, the De La Salle College." There are also some problems with tenses and subject-verb agreement such as "La Salle Green Hills also undergone accreditation and have had exemplary results when the school is evaluated by the Philippine Accrediting Association of Schools, Colleges and Universities in 1972, 1974, 1977 (after a 3 year accreditation grant), 1982, 1987 (both receiving 5 year grants), all of these visits were given clean accreditations making the only high school to do such."

B. MoS compliance:
Dates are not properly linked, and acronyms are used without first providing its full name like "PAASCU." Terms are also used which would not be understood by Wikipedia users who are unfamiliar with the topic. For example, I am unfamiliar with "survey form B," "Securities and Exchange Commission" (I doubt you're referring to the U.S. government agency by the same name), "NAMFREL," "football" (on this wiki, the term must be differentiated between American football and what is also known as soccer), etc.
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
Many sections and paragraphs do not have citations.

C. No original research:
OR seems to be present especially in "The Campus" section.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
The article is broad but not focused. Editors have to think about what is truly important information to add to the article. Every fact must answer the question, "Would anybody else care about this?" For example, is it necessary for people in South Africa and India to know which building houses the cafeteria? Probably not.
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Sections of the article read like a promotional pamphlet.
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
There seem to be some fairly-recent changes made to the article by a single user. I do not believe, though, that there are any current editing wars.
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
The seal is the most prominent symbol on the page, along with three pictures of campus buildings. I'm not sure pictures of the pool and soccer field are extremely important; they could really be pictures of any swimming pool and any soccer field. Best picture is the photo of the gym, which does have unusual architecture. That is the kind of information that people might be interested in, as it is very much out of the ordinary.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
I recognize the work that has gone into this article; however, there are a number of style, MoS, citation and focusing issues that must be worked out before article can achieve GA status. Example of great GA article on a private religious school is Presbyterian Ladies' College, Sydney.

Update: First, I want to apologize for this late review. I typically have articles on my watch list, but for whatever reason, the two articles I reviewed on June 4 did not get added. Unfortunately this article does not yet qualify for GA status. There are still issues with WP:MoS compliance, non-encyclopedic prose, areas missing citations, and a great deal of OR. I hope the editors will take at the GA articles at Wikipedia:WikiProject Schools#Good Articles, adjust "La Salle Green Hills" accordingly and renominate. Best, epicAdam (talk) 00:05, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]