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Reviewer: HueSatLum (talk · contribs) 23:51, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review. Some issues:

  • More links are needed; entire sections are without links
  • The lead is overall too short; per WP:LEADLENGTH, it should be "two or three paragraphs".
  • I am not sure why "Sultan" links to Ayyubid dynasty.
  • "Mt. Carmel" → "Mount Carmel"
  • Add a {{convert}} for distances
Links: Items are in general only linked once in an article, the lower down an article you get the sparser are the links, as repetitions of terms and referents occur.
Lead: extended it to two paras.
Sultan: There is a difficulty here - you can talk of "King of England" but Saladin held Egypt and Syria in a sort of personal union, and there isn't a geographic or political entity called "Sultanate of Egypt and Syria" to refer to, just the dynasty. I have rearranged the sentence, it's a bit clunky but probably reasonable.
That's fine, I just wouldn't expect that to link there. HueSatLum 01:23, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Mt.: OK, done
Distances: No idea how to this, I'm just a writer and I'm a computer-phobe.
 Done HueSatLum 01:23, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
    Good.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    Plenty of references.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    Covers all aspects of the battle.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
    Neutrally written.
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
    Very stable.
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    Images are all free.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Quite well-written and informative. HueSatLum 01:23, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Many thanks for your help. Urselius (talk) 08:25, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]