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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Ammonia fuming/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Curly Turkey (talk · contribs) 23:11, 3 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this review. Curly Turkey (gobble) 23:11, 3 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Feel free to disagree with any of my feedback—not all of it is necessary to pass the GA review, and some of it is just my preferences. Also, DISCLAIMER: I know remarkably little about the subject.

Prose

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Lead

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  • you note that "white oak" links to the wrong species. Do you know which of the European species in List of Quercus species it might be?
  • If you are referring to the hidden comment in the article, that is from user Piledhigheranddeeper, not me. It is not exactly linking to the wrong species but may be overly specific, linking to the American Quercus alba. The species Stickley was working with was undoubtedly Q. alba and this is still probably right in in a US context. However, if you are sold European white oak in the UK it is most likely English oak, Q. robur. That is very likely the fumed samples I provided (I got them from here) but I couldn't say for certain. I daresay other European species can be succesfully fumed, such as the Cornish oak (now why is that a redlink? I'll do something about that in a minute) Q. petraea. See what this supplier has to say on the indistinguishability of wood from those oak species for instance. I think the sensible thing would be for white oak to redirect to List of Quercus species#Section Quercus. Perhaps with a hatnote to the specific US species. In short, I don't think there is anything wrong with this article itself. SpinningSpark 18:25, 5 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • most usually associated: I think "most" is superfluous

Advantages and disadvantages

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  • all taken from the same tree.: I think you can safely drop "all"
  • may not darken so noticeably as white oak, or not at all,: I think it reads better if you drop the second "not"

Process

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  • may be provided or else the ammonia: "or else" on gfirst reading sounds ominous—drop the "else"?

History

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  • introduced to the USA: there are those who get pissy about suing "USA"—to the extant that the MOS deprecates its use

Structuring

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  • Would "Process" not be better placed before "Advantages and disadvantages"?

Comprehensive

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  • The article's brief, but I don't have the feeling anything important's missing

Refs

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  • ref #2: need a comma after "Ammonium Hydroxide"
  • Done
  • ref #3 & #8: need endashes for page ranges
  • Can't find any close paraphrasing problems in the sources I could access:
    • Hasluck checks out; is there any reason to leave out the bit about turpentine?
    • ref #9: you give the page range 117–119, but I don't see anything about this on page 117
    • Clark & Thomas-Clark, Rodel, and Smith check out
    • I can't access Cathers or Stickley
      • Gbooks doesn't find Cathers from the ISBN link, but it gets there if you put the title directly in gbooks search (under a different ISBN). Amazon finds it from the ISBN link as does WorldCat. Not seeing a problem with Stickley, that comes up in gbooks from the ISBN link in preview mode. SpinningSpark 19:45, 5 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Kevin Rodel, "Fuming with ammonia", in Finishes & Finishing Techniques, pages 56-60, Taunton Press, 1999 ISBN 1561582980.: I can't find the guideline, but I believe we're supposed to capitalize titles in book case for English sources even when the source doesn't. Also, need an endash for the page range.
  • should the authors in the "Bibliography" not be formatted SURNAME, GIVENNAME?
  • Links to publishers would be nice

Images

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———Curly Turkey (gobble) 01:07, 4 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Curly, nice to here from you again. Belated congratulations on getting Lusitania to FA.
You have certainly gone beyond the requirements of GA in some of your comments, especially on the references, and a lot of this I would not normally bother with for a GA. If this was headed for FA it would be different, but it ain't. I don't much see the point of doing endashes manually when so many people are going around fixing them with scripts. Surname order is not mandated and has little utility on a short list like this. I've never been a fan of links to publishers in bibliographies; ideally there should be only one link, to the relevant source, as this makes it easier for a reader to use. Maybe link the author as well if notable, but that's all; linking the publisher is just one more blue link that might lead the reader to the wrong place. Chapter titles in books, like journal articles in a journal volume, are properly rendered in sentence case between quotation marks: see WP:CITE/ES#Books. SpinningSpark 17:46, 5 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I think I'm about done with your comments. I intend to add a passage about Stickley fuming whole rooms just as soon as I remember where I read it. Don't know why I didn't put that in at the time. SpinningSpark 19:48, 5 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Pass Pass. It looks like you've added the bit about fuming rooms already, too. I've gone and done some formatting on the article as well. Curly Turkey (gobble) 23:07, 5 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the pass. It was easier to search gbooks for a new source on Stickley's room fuming (mentioned surprisingly frequently) than to recall the original passage from a senile brain. SpinningSpark 23:32, 5 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]