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Reviewer: Rublov (talk · contribs) 12:57, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]


GA criteria:

Ref spotchecks (three references chosen by random number generator):

  • 6: 18 stories, 260 units, OKW Architects, and landmarked building rehabilitation verified from source. The source does not mention Related Midwest. This is a little pedantic, but the article says "in the center of the block" while the source says "at the heart of the plan"; I'm not sure these mean exactly the same thing.
  • 22: Pass.
  • 25: Pass.

TonyTheTiger, thank you for preparing this article for GA. I am putting the review on hold pending your response to my comments above. rblv (talk) 14:05, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi TonyTheTiger, is this ready for me to take another look, or are you still working on it? rblv (talk) 11:11, 1 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I think I thought I was done, but when you posted this query, I double-checked and found one remaining issue. I'll get to it this week.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 14:43, 3 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
TonyTheTiger, I haven't forgotten about this. I am planning to another round of copy-editing by next week and show you my suggested changes. After that, I think it will pass the criteria. rblv (talk) 13:04, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@TonyTheTiger: Here's where we're at. I took a stab at rewriting the lead and "Architecture" section (User:Rublov/900 West Randolph), but I didn't touch "History". The flow in that section is still very choppy and there's a lot of trivial detail that makes it hard to read. Happy to elaborate with specific examples if it's not clear to you. I can give you another a week to work on that. rblv (talk) 12:54, 20 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Rublov:, I have incorporated your suggestions. I am pretty much put all that I am going to put into this article for now.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:06, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@TonyTheTiger: Thank you for getting back to me, but I'm afraid that after a month it's time for me to close this review. I have found that the article still does not meet criteria (1) and (3), particularly in the "History" section, which needs a thorough copy-edit and culling of unnecessary detail.

  • The first three sentences are all disconnected from one another, and their relevance to the article topic is unclear.
  • The building is situated in the section of Randolph Street known as Restaurant Row. – odd digression from discussing the building's permitting process
  • for the project that was to be taller than anything west of Halsted – this feels like a detail that's tacked on to an unrelated sentence
  • that avails additional contiguous footage – I don't think this use of 'avails' is grammatical.
  • Thus, it has official billing as "the city's first high-rise with an African American Minority Business Enterprise co-leading construction". – kind of repeats the previous sentence; should be integrated better
  • Lots of unnecessary detail. Not of all this has to go, but altogether it's too much trivial information for a general-purpose encyclopedia article.
    • with 300 residential units and 220 parking spaces (referring to one of many intermediate design proposals, not the final building)
    • The first renderings of the building were unveiled at the beginning of February 2018 with a 170 North Peoria address.
    • according to June 2018 correspondences with 27th Ward Alderman Walter Burnett
    • The building permit for the project was issued to LR Contracting Company
    • 2,358–3,418 square feet (219.1–317.5 m2) with 12-foot-high (3.7 m) ceilings

I appreciate your work on the article and hope that it will become a GA in the future. rblv (talk) 02:09, 26 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]