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Nominator: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Spinixster (talk · contribs) 07:37, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I'll be reviewing this. At first glance, there are some issues with the article that should be fixed:

  • There is 1 CN tag in the article as well as some unsourced parts.
  • I'd suggest rearranging the sections per MOS:FILM; right now, the placements are confusing.
    I think the Music section should be under the Production section; many other film articles follow this trend. Also, the Filming section may suffer from oversectioning because the sections are quite short. Spinixster (chat!) 12:58, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • There are some (MOS:EDITORIAL, I think) issues with the prose, such as She deliberately filmed using shots in the style of a drama, although the film is a comedy. The "nose kiss" scene was suggested by Ken Marino, and it made Bell laugh so much she told him he would need to do it twice.
    I did not remember the exact guideline, but the part I mentioned is much better now. I'll do an in-depth review later. Spinixster (chat!) 13:53, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per MOS:LEAD, the lead is too short.

I'll put this review on hold for now before I do a full review. Feel free to ask any questions if needed. Spinixster (chat!) 07:37, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Full review

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Thanks for the needed improvements, I will now review the article further. This may take a while.

Per WP:FILMCAST, any uncredited roles should be sourced to reliable sources. Spinixster (trout me!) 05:58, 25 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
removed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:15, 25 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the changes. There's just a few more things that I think are needed before I pass this article:

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